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My headphones are in,
the world goes out.
I let the wind pass,
and I close my eyes,
to shut out the pain.
Sing for the rain,
and when my sight is bright,again,
I Breathe in new air.
In a stare,
A far away glare,
I see him.
I see him standing there.
In the palm of his hands lies,
the parts of my broken heart.
"A CRY FOR HELP IS WHEN YOU SAY HELP IN A LOUD VOICE".

- Buffy.
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rebelliousmisfit Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i luv this! i totally understand wat u were goin through. greaat job
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lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
thanks :]
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Cospalyer Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012
我可以如何联系你呢。I‘m a Chinese girl,Do you know QQ?
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012  Student Writer
I'm sorry I don't know Chinese. I don't know what QQ is.
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3878decode Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Shitty things happen to good PEOPLE:( Hey I once was one of the shitty things ....
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011  Student Writer
how so?
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kamikadx Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011
nice one ;D
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2011  Student Writer
thanks <3
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Heroinx-x Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
i love the slight rhyming and the simplicity.
short and sweet :heart:
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2011  Student Writer
thnkyou<3
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thatcatchance Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
you see who? what pain do you shut out? is the audience supposed to have a broken crush and pain that makes them develop isolation through music ?
I don't get how this stuff is popular other than the fact that DA got money. I would think my stuff is great but no one sees it, and if it isn't, tear it apart so I learn. Anyways, I'm not gonna give DA money. I'm just gonna rebel and post links on premium, popular-for-no-discernable-reason works.

this is my favorite and will blow your socks off. [link]
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011  Student Writer
before you try to judge my work, you should try to understand it,because is you are going to judge it without understanding the piece you sound like a complete cunt. =] with that being said, let me try to explain to you.

the person I see is the person that broke my heart, the person causing the pain, that pain I shut out through listening to music, the music that isolates me from the world and the other things I do the poem is build up to help me to see why I suffering. there is no audience because I shut out the world, the only audience I guess would be the readers.
and yes I do suppose, without reading that your work is good, because I believe that every artist should have some belief in themselves.
giving money to deviantart, is optional, so what's your point really?
Im just really happy that there's a place me to share my work.

btw my work may be popular because other people understand my work and can relate to it.
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thatcatchance Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2011
I was just trying to spread the criticism I've received eagerly from doctors in english, because I think the understanding was well worth my inadequacy with my past sense of writing. I remember more than one doctor speaking of the horrors sentimentalism brings to the poetry world and understood their rhetoric, so I merely tried to pass it along and advertise my ways in hopes of seeing more development brought to literature rather than embracing the selfish writings that don't reach out to anyone than birds of the feather. sorry, just don't mind me if you don't want to.
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lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2011  Student Writer
okay, I don't mind your criticism, but when you came off like that it sound like you were bashing my stuff man.
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Rebeckington Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011   General Artist
Oh I do like this :) It has a terrific rolling rhythm, and the rhyming sequence is really satisfying. It rather sounds Edgar Allan Poe-esque, somehow, in its sombre tone, short lines and rhyme. It somehow sounds mysterious too.

Lovely work :)
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011  Student Writer
thank you so much for your comment, I was starting to think that no one really picked up on the rhythm.
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:iconrebeckington:
Rebeckington Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2011   General Artist
A good rhythm is one of the main points I look for in a good poem! I'm usually more of a traditionalist when it comes to poetry.

And it was a pleasure both reading and commenting. :)
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Lobaluna95 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing.... I can totally relate to this, well minus the boy standing there... But anyway this great ^.^
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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Lobaluna95 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Welcome ^.^
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:iconuke69:
Uke69 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You just spoke for me...
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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Uke69 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem ^^
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zeldaGirl97 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Student General Artist
i really really REALLY love this!
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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zeldaGirl97 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Student General Artist
welcome(:
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Cuddles1234xds Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
this is such a nice piece. :heart:
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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Cuddles1234xds Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011
:aww: your welcome! :aww:
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MizLeo Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
That's exactly how i feel.. Thank you for sharing..
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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MyHorseMyHeart Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
amazing :heart:
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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THFan259 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This great.I can see you wrote it with your heart,so this a thing that must be apreciated.
Anyway,is very good. I love it ^^
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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TheColorWheel Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
music, helps everything. awesome descriptions.
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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TheColorWheel Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011
anytime! :D
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Painapurru Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
hmph, been there *sigh*
but anyway! beautiful peice! +fave
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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sanmononoke Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
Beautiful. Just beautiful.
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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sanmononoke Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011
You're welcome. :) It's really nice, and I can totally relate to it.
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kriss-uchiha Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
"My headphones are in,
the world goes out."
these words describe me very much
beautiful piece :hug:
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:iconlostlightxxx:
lostlightxxx Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Student Writer
:heart:thankyou
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kriss-uchiha Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2011
^__^
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